Obviously, a character may exhibit a number of these behaviours.

I would debate that that's telling. .’. Thank you so much for sharing. Books available: At An Uncertain Hour, The Dweller in the Crack,  Steal Away, Anthologies I'm in: Light of the Last Day (the FWO anthology), Tales from the Fluffy Bunny, It's Come to Our Attention, Unburied Treasures, Trespass, The Tale Trove, Ravensmoot, All critiques are very welcome, but I'm especially looking for feedback on Tales the Winds Tell, The Empire of Nandesh, Children of Ice - revised, Dreams of Fire and Snow You're welcome to copy my stories if that makes the process easier, provided you don't use the copy for anything except critiquing here, But I'm not old; I've just lived a long time - the Traveller, "Personally, I wouldn't want to read that." I got rid of the book. But it can get silly if done to excess. Adverbs can also easily be overused and so make it harder for readers to visualise what you’re describing.

A quirked or single raised eyebrow=skepticism or amusement. Use it because more than 50% of human communication is non-verbal. For example, he or she may be shocked and angry, or shocked and happy. I'm going with "She glanced at him, her eyes tight and worried.".

Here are some of the telltale signs of anger in a person’s expression: Their eyebrows would be lowered and pulled closer together Their eyelids would become squinted or raised (or their eyes may bulge if they are enraged)

etc.

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An effective description will contain sufficient and varied elaboration of details to communicate a sense of the subject being described. etc. I agree that you don't want to go overboard with the showing either--except in situations where the character would really be noticing miniscule details. How about - She gave him a worried glance. MS word's spellchecker says it is but this site's spellchecker says it's fine spelled without the accent. Avoid all adverbs used to describe dialogue – ‘he said angrily’, or ‘she said nervously’. Peesh avoided his gaze, starting as her eyes fell on the flakes of leather that covered her hands... Spire City serial fiction, Season One: Infected, Season Two: Pursued, and Season Three: Unwoven--complete and available in a book-length bundles (print and electronic), along with the novelette "The Spire Singers" and the novella The Patterns of Cloth and Dreams.

and it’s not on the list. I often add smething like tightly wringing the hands or biting the lower lip or somehting else like that to better show worried. And speaking of the word cliche--is it or isn't it supposed to have an accent over the e? This is the most helpful article I have read about telling vs.

I'm sorry Daus, but Peesh is liek one of those sounds I make (It's actually onomatopoeia where I say the word for the sound) when I'm annoyed at something: Peesh!

Get rid of all intensifiers – words such as ‘very’, ‘extremely’, ‘incredibly’, ‘exceedingly’, ‘remarkably’, ‘totally’, ‘completely’ and ‘absolutely’. For me, who fidgets when and with what says something about their temperaments as well as their emotional state.There was a superb scene in Bujold's Curse of Chalion where this psychologically disturbed (and magically cursed) character was meticulously dismantling a rose during a conversation she was having with the pov character--and arranging the dismembered flower parts in an abstract pattern on the empty chair next to her. --Farah Mendlesohn. Sometimes you need to sum things up a bit because describing every facial expression in purely physical terms wouldn't make for good reading. _____ Administrator. Great work!

Reina (the character who is looking worried in this scene) is a fairly cool and reserved customer overall, so she likely wouldn't be doing a lot of hand wringing or ******* and moaning. This is dangerous if astute advice. In any case, I agree that it wouldn't be necessary to show everything, and I think Kukana's expression of 'shooting a worried glance' works just fine. Body language is often an involuntary reaction to something perceived by one of the five senses. Someone coming in from a different generational or cultural perspective may not know what you mean. Narrowed eyes indicate anger or skepticism. "Her eyes looked worried." etc.

“Excellent list,” she said, rubbing her hands together and grinning. The difference between "there was a dragon at the end of the lane."



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